It was through a series of random clicks that I again landed on this story after several months (I believe). Lovely chapters as usual. Considering that this is your first work of fanfic I'm stunned and awed by your talent of spinnig such a great plot with all the right amount of angst, love, curiosity, light hearted moments etc etc... ~phew~ And I'm absolutely, unmentionably saddend that this fic is On-Hiatus. Oh how I bemoan the loss of such great stories that we measely, bedazzled poor souls find not very often now-a-days in Dokuga.

Pls update, wont u? Pretty pls, with a cherry on top with a geneous sprinkle of chocolate chips to go with it??? ^_^

~Voracious 

Apologies for the long break =) Exams are over! It is the holidays! Hopefully a chapter will be out by end of this week or beginning of next week!

Lionel 

love <3

I'm really enjoying this story; it has a premise that I have yet to find. Most stories are based on large overtures of obvious change, like my own for instance. But yours focuses on a subtle difference between Inuyasha and Sesshomaru. I can't wait for the next chapter!

Keep going, Lionel! I'm cheering for you!

Keep it coming

Good luck! Good luck to you on exams! 

It's evident that though Kagome may be having thought's of Sesshoumaru, they are not over the top, "OOOO I love him sooo much" no they are nothing like that, they are cautious and barely even romantic if at all. They are both acting strangely and they both have their excuses/reasons for it, 

Matsusan village ,” Sesshoumaru stated curtly

*extra space between village and comma

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he silented commuted to Shippou to remain where he was

*I don't believe communted works to well here, usually its defined as "to travel" or "to change" maybe you meant communicated or another synonym?

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THe miko was viewed upon as his mother after all.

*Uncapilize the H

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begin to touch me so casually…?’Kagome thought with alarm

 *Missing space

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Sesshoumaru’s eyes narrowed that word.

*Insert "at", unless of course you actually did mean that his eyes narrowed a word, which I do believe to be impossible

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Preparations for the ceremony would be easier if there were no tension between participants of the ceremony.

*No tension huh? With Akemi coming and Inuyasha and Kagome's relationship on the rocks I don't believe Sesshoumaru will be able to roll out this ceremony without tension between some people

This chapter was very indepth with what Kagome was feeling. But she's feeling so many different feelings at once it's understandable for her to be confused about what she wants. Hell, I'm confused about all the feelings she's feeling as well. She goes back and forth between wanting to love inuyasha and just not loving inuyasha anymore. And then she doesn't know if he even wants to stay with her or not. All in all, its very confusing and probably later will be cleared up when Inuyasha comes to. You did well of portryaing everything she was going through, keep it up in the later chapters.

dug in his claws into the ground to prevent from being dragged away easily

*their

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her that his fluffy momoko was brushing

* mokomoko

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dragon's neck, in case they needed to grab hold of Ah or Un's neck for support

* dragons' necks

Long Time No See...,

Anyways, I know you might have had some thoughts on whether or not Sesshoumaru was too sadistic-ee. I don't think so. I think, if anything, you portrayed him decently well. Some authors like to make believe that Sesshoumaru is a big marshmallow and is really soft and warm, but I believe that he is indeed sadistic in nature many times. And you captured that very well.

I still have mixed feelings about Akemi though! I hate her and like her at the same time. I really want to see what you do with her in the future.

"and pulled out a small, red silk pouch"

*No comma

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The tips of the flower petals were razor sharp; making this good enough to be used as a throwing weapon.

*When using a semicolon the two phrases are to be complete sentences. However, your second phrase is a fragment.

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Inuyasha!” cried Sango, 

*Missing Quotation

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  ‘Sesshoumaru seemed… slightly… sadistic…just…a tad…’

*Who thought this? Was it Sango, Miroku, or both?

I have a feeling this is going to be very awkward, especially with Inuyasha and Kagome. And I'm waiting for Inuyasha's reaction when he sees Akemi and her family at the festivities once they get started. I'm sure it won't be a pleasant one. I'm also wondering if her father knows of her antics and if he'll be interested in getting to know his good friend's second son. Want more of this.

Ok, scratch the question. I got my answer. I still think Inuyasha should rip Akemi a new one. I don't care who her father is.

Great Chapter!  Her emotions, her turmoil, you captured it perfectly.  Can't wait for the next chapter!

This leaves me with one question. Where IS Inuyasha? He should rip Akemi a new one. I'm sorry, but for the moment, that's how I feel about her. She pretty much raped the poor hanyou. Want more.

Whooops! Thanks for the reviews, I've fixed up the problem!

Lionel

I think you might want to re do this chapter you repeat your self a few times Im not sure if you ment to or not but you did. Other than that good job keep it up!!

~~Great chapter!! I was just gonna tell you, you posted the same chapter twice in one page! I was quite sad to get halfway done and find out it was the same thing pasted over again. T____T More soon please! :D

Awesome chapter!

...except for some reason it's doubled. o_O

Thanks so much for writing!

Ummm did you mean to basically repeat the first section of the chapter in the second and even third sections???

Eagerly waiting for more but I just thought I'd let you know that the chapter has been pasted twice here. ~SA

loving your story!  I don't suppose this is where the rapist gets a happy ending story is it?  Guess I'll find out soon enough

Thanks