Wonderfully written fanfic, couldn't stop from reading this all in one night:) your descriptives are spot on and I love the dynamic between all the characters. You are very talented! Can't wait to read more:)
This story is amazing! I don't remember if I ever left a note, but I want to tell you how I've always been looking forward to your next update and enjoying the way your story progressed! Slow and steady, and not a single plot detail left behind. I absolutely love your wit and skill, for it takes a lot to create such devious characters!
A few minor comments, though. I understand in a story, a lot of titles and such can be made up, but I can tell you're making an effort to have titles and such make sense given the location/language, so hence these comments. It's too late to change, but just for reference :)
Mao = Devil king, used to describe the leader of demons and such. As a result, Miko no Mao would end up being translated to "the demon/evil leader of miko/priestesses" which is a little different than what you intended I think. Miko of the demon king should be Mao no Miko instead
Saidai Mao => in Japanese, this should probably be Saidai no Mao.
Zhongguo => This threw me off because it's the Chinese term rather than Japanese. In Japanese, this should be Chugoku
Zyren (Chapter 42) - Tue 15 Sep 2015
*gasp* Kento is the spy?! Why Kento Why!!! I liked him. I can't wait to see how this plays out though.
Awesome chapter. I love that Kagome and Kimi are becoming friends; kinda. ^_^
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