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PoisonIvy (Chapter 9) - Thu 04 Dec 2008

Really love the story so far.  I think you've got the characters portrayed perfectly, even their emotional responses to everything that has happened.  Nice pace to the story, too.  It doesn't feel like it's moving too quickly or dragging at all.  I truly enjoy the way you've described everything, too.  Actions can give insight into the character with the words used to describe them, and the scenery and clothing and other irrelevant details aren't overdone.  The only thing I'd like to mention, and it's minor, is possible overuse of Sesshoumaru referring to himself in the third person.  It especially gets out of hand in the third chapter.  The constant use of it just makes dialogue that should be really poignant a bit unwieldy and ridiculous.  A few typos here and there too, but that happens to everyone.


knifethrower (Chapter 9) - Wed 03 Dec 2008

I'm really enjoying this story.  I was kind of worrying about why I'm so fascinated by stories where the characters we love go through so much suffering, and it occurred to me that this is one facet of what got me hooked on watching the anime in the first place.  I really identified with Kagome and all the hell the men in her life put her through.  From the beginning I didn't think it was right to pair her with Inuyasha:  if I were Kagome, the first time he compared me with Kikyo I would have been with Kouga.  Inuyasha and Kagome's relationship is just so dang disfunctional- so in the end of the manga, Inuyasha and Kagome get married.  I don't think that is going to be a marriage made in heaven for long- I just know Kag and Sess belong together in the end!   So at any rate, I'm enjoying the heck out of Sess and Kag suffering, and feeling sorry for Sess, because he really loves Kagome, but maybe he's being punished for the girls he really DID pull that stunt on.  I have a couple of male friends who are old enough to know better who pick up women, use them, dump them, and then speak about them with disrespect.  Their rationale is that if the woman let them pick her up, she deserves to be treated like a tramp.  It's enough to make a woman never go out with a man.  So I don't mind you making Sess suffer for a while, even though he's the greatest, he needs to learn a lesson in compassion!     


Crisalide (Chapter 9) - Wed 03 Dec 2008

Please have Sesshoumaru kill each and every single one of Kagome's "dates" yeah? As well as that guy who told Inuyasha that Sesshoumaru was just playing a game?

 

As well, though I very much enjoy your story, I don't see how he doesn't just throw her into an empty room and spell it out for her? Sure she is a miko, but he's a pretty fucking strong demon! Oh make them fight! That would be entertaining!


Nin (Chapter 9) - Wed 03 Dec 2008
Oops!. My review below was for chapter 9. I can't wait for more updates, I like this fic.^^

Nin (Chapter 1) - Wed 03 Dec 2008
Oh wow you left me hanging xD.. I feel so bad for Sesshoumaru because he really does love her. Kagome was so cruel in the new chapter, but she feels used. Sessho should take her home before someone takes advantage of poor Kagome.

Bell (Chapter 8) - Tue 02 Dec 2008
You know, I absolutely can not stand whats going on between sess and kag!!! Make it better soon!! Very good so far, keep up the good work...

Inkasha Taisho (Chapter 7) - Sun 30 Nov 2008

Wow didn't know Kags had it in her!!  Poor Sessho!! Loosing his valued control like that. Must be so hard on Fluffy!!  This is getting really good. I can't wait to the next update.


Bluemiko (Chapter 7) - Sun 30 Nov 2008
I sense some more bad blood is going to pass between Sesshomaru and Kagome. I so excited to see what happens next. Keep up the good work and please update soon:)

Crisalide (Chapter 7) - Sun 30 Nov 2008

Hiya. I quite enjoy your story. It really saddens me the torment that these two are going through. Sesshoumaru's cousin is kinda cute in of course an annoying way.

I do quite enjoy the past scenes that you add in there. It makes the story easier to bear, at least for me.


sweetest angel (Chapter 7) - Sun 30 Nov 2008

I think I will have a heart-attack if you don't do something soon! lol

It's a good story. But now the pressure is killing me! I think it's time that someone talk to her before she does something stupid because from how the things look, it will certainly kill Sesshomaru soon!

If InuYasha can't do something, or his mother, maybe his cousin, Suki can do something...?

I really can't wait now the moment she will know. I don't ask for them to immediatly jump on each other when the truth is told but THAT pressure is just too much to bare! Please!

update as soon as you can, please!!

 


Inkasha Taisho (Chapter 6) - Fri 28 Nov 2008

Wow. I think i may cry.  This was so sad. Poor Sessho.  The man is just down.  And Inuyasha is always sticking his nose where it doesn't belong.  He should have confronted Sessho, but noooo!! He had to drag Kagome into the discussion!!  Damn, double damn!! I hope he can repair the damage done. I can't wait til you update.


sunset in love (Chapter 6) - Fri 28 Nov 2008
ah, please... it's getting good, please let them be together again... update soon....

Anonymous (Chapter 4) - Wed 26 Nov 2008

Very well articulated. I want more please.


sunset in love (Chapter 4) - Tue 25 Nov 2008
by the way dear Oroyukae-chan, my reviews is especially for chapter 1-4, and very very soon for chapter 45 perhaps? don't worry about anonymous, it's up to you to get a beta, only if you wish for it, i can understand your fic just fine, the advantage of having complete dvd collection and manga, knowing very well all the characters, except... they don't picture izayoi that much, do they?

sunset in love (Chapter 1) - Tue 25 Nov 2008
poor sesshy... and poor kaggie... i don't think inuyasha is bad, too immature though, suit him just fine... the brash boy... but i feel bad for sesshy, he is a demon of honour... in the anime at least... anyway, i really love you fic, and so are many readers out there, so when can we have more.... (with big puppy eyes that can rival shippou) pleaseeeeee....

Bree (Chapter 4) - Tue 25 Nov 2008
I can't believe it. What a sad misunderstanding. Please tell me this isn't the end of Sesshomaru and Kagome. I love your story. Please update soon:)

Anonymous (Chapter 4) - Tue 25 Nov 2008

Okay, you took care of the dialogue issue, now you need to work on your punctuation. There should be no space before or after the quotation mark, the same goes for the hyphen marks as well. For example :  "Sit down Susan." There should be no space before the comma but there is one after it. For example: The red, orange, and blue ball. The only reason I bring these up is because to continually see them distracts me from the story and makes me not want to keep reading.


Bell (Chapter 2) - Mon 24 Nov 2008
Good story keep it up cant wait to find out what happens next...

Enduring Ice (Chapter 2) - Mon 24 Nov 2008
That's low, even for Sesshomaru. I know that Kagome is the forgiving type, but I don't see how Sesshomaru is going to worm his way back into her heart after this.

Nobody (Chapter 1) - Sun 23 Nov 2008

omg! What? I want to read more but it ended :(. That was great. I loved it! Keep up the good job and i will keep reading.


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