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rose (Chapter 3) - Thu 07 Nov 2013

next chapter please


satuross (Chapter 1) - Thu 07 Nov 2013

uh oh. i thought this is a one shot heh heh


joyouki (Chapter 1) - Thu 07 Nov 2013

Love it! I can just picture Sess seeing her in a bikini...I was laughing so hard!! Can't wait to read more!


Serena (Chapter 3) - Wed 06 Nov 2013

wow! it looks like christmas came early this year `cause i was not expecting that amazingly super fast update. thank youuuu! cant wait for more :) 


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 3) - Wed 06 Nov 2013

Love the lemon it was HOTTT! I'm glad their mated, will Kagome transform into a youkai? Since it says at the end  an interesting transformation was taking place. If have any pointers for future lemon scenes I'll let you know, please update the next chapters quick. Keep it coming.


Tsukiyome Thaiso (Chapter 3) - Wed 06 Nov 2013

Oh my gods !!! I WANT TO SEE WHAT WILL HAPPEN  !!


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 2) - Wed 06 Nov 2013

I like the start of this, keep it coming.


Nilee1 (Chapter 1) - Wed 06 Nov 2013

I loved it. Please continue--pretty please 


Seraphina Dragon (Chapter 1) - Wed 06 Nov 2013

Please write more of this wonderful story


Gabbie (Chapter 1) - Wed 06 Nov 2013

I love this story!!!


I do so hope you continue this story.  I look forward to any additional chapters (if you choose to continue this story).  I would love to see how their relationship evolves and how their future children grow up.

 

Once again, I love this story!!!


mari (Chapter 1) - Wed 06 Nov 2013

great loved it thanks.


Serena (Chapter 1) - Wed 06 Nov 2013

soooooo good!! please keep writing more! cant wait for a kickass kagome >:)


UnknownRandomness (Chapter 1) - Wed 06 Nov 2013

Wow, that was certainly an adventure for your first story! Well done!

I personally felt that the switches between POVs were effective but they happened too often- it really interrupted the flow of the story for me.
And a lot happened, perhaps if you'd split it into two or three separate chapters you could have explored the character's and plot development a little more.
I hope you don't mind me saying this- these are just things you may want to consider in the future. 

However, this is great! A very enjoyable read with an entertaining plot: I wish I had written this well (or as much) when I started writing fanfiction. If I were you, I would definitely write more- you can take this to so many interesting places! (And I'm cheering at the prospect of a lemon... the kissing scene in this was certainly nice and steamy!)

So keep going! I for one will be waiting to see what you come up with next :)

UnknownRandomness


foxserenity (Chapter 1) - Wed 06 Nov 2013

It really good!!! Please updated next chapter quickly (I hope there will be lemon in next chapter *shy*)

Take that Inuyasha is what you deserve for threat Kagome badly


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 1) - Wed 06 Nov 2013

Love the story, for this being your first fanfiction it's an awesome story, update the next chapters quick. Keep it coming.


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