Best. Chapter. Yet. ^_^
Oh, this chapter was so touching!
I loved how you portrayed Sesshoumaru. Somewhere deep inside he has a great heart, and now he allowed himself to feel. Good work on portraying his loyalty, like a proud dog he is. And seriousness didn`t make your chapter somber, I liked that. You balanced light and dark perfectly.
I really love this story :)
I love your story. I can't wait to read more.
Good job editing this chapter ^^d
Hello there :) First let me say that I'm really enjoying this story. It really is a very sweet, comdedic and so far it has been well written...so please take what I'm about to say as constructive criticism. You really need to go back and edit this chapter. You switched to present tense during the whole fight scene which is inconsistant with the way the rest of the story has been written so far. It should all be in past tense in order to not disrupt the flow of how the story is read. As a reader, it really took me out of the story to suddenly be thrown into present tense. Also, the dialog and events seemed a bit rushed and choppy. You may want to go back and make sure it's a little more paced out and natural.
Please forgive me, but I critique because I care >_< It just that the other chapters are really well-written so this chapter needs a little cleaning and re-writing in order to be up their caliber.
I hope you don't take this negetively, because I really do like this story very much and I appreciate your hard work. Thank you!
Yes, your cliffy killed me. Yeah! Sess is coming back. Can't wait to see what happens when they realize it wasn't a trick of the light.
Sora (Chapter 10) - Tue 26 Jul 2011
Poor doggy Sesshoumaru, he has to endure a hard life of a puppy. Oh, and his heart begins to warm up. Yes, I think he needs all that to learn to love.
Haha this is fantastic ^_^ His internal grousing in contrast with Kagome's enternally sunny disposition is priceless. And really just the circumstance itself is comdey gold. It's so wonderfully ridiculous to picture him trotting around as a little fluffy dog. I can't help but picture him as a little samoyed hehehe ^__^ So cute!
Oh, and I can't wait to see her reaction when she finds out she stripped naked infront of the Mighty Lord of the West. I'm sure her it will be...lively. lol
I love it. I hope you update soon. Keep up the good work!
Sora (Chapter 7) - Tue 12 Jul 2011
OMG! Poor Sesshoumaru! lol
This is awesome! I enjoyed this chapter
Sora (Chapter 6) - Wed 29 Jun 2011
Great chapter. Now I love this story even more.
Suggestions? I don`t know... writing with paw is good, but I wander if he knows she can read?.. May be first he decides to remind her of him somehow or of their first encounter, or of times when he rescued her...
Hello, I am truly enjoying your story.
I had a suggest though that since he can still think coherently and intelligently, perhaps Sesshoumaru could write in the soil with his paws his identity. That is if he isn't offend by dirt soiling his pristineness.
Sora (Chapter 5) - Mon 27 Jun 2011
Ahaha! “Fluffy! No? ... Ok, then Mr. Fluffy!” Yes, he definitely needs a plan.
I enjoyed this chapter.
avidreaderone (Chapter 4) - Sat 25 Jun 2011
This story is too cute - I like the imagination you have with how Sesshormaru thinks and tries to act like a real dog. Please keep writing!
This story is starting out so cute and so far a little different from the other puppy-dog Sesshoumaru's I've read. I just hope that you do one thing they failed to do. They never completed them! They eventually abandoned their stories. Please, do not do like them. I hope to read this story all the way to the end.
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