Love the plot, it has potential. Someone could use this same plot to make a longer and detailed story but i still loved this story too.
*uncontrollable giggling* I loved it!
Amanda (Chapter 2) - Fri 14 Jan 2011
Just a thought, but in this chapter you switched from a 3rd person perspective to a first person, which is kinda disconcerting to the reader.
amy (Chapter 6) - Fri 14 Jan 2011
THANK YOU FOR A SWEET BEGINNING TO A NEW YEAR! IT WAS SMOOTH< SiLKY, AND WARM LIKE A PEACH!
TruGemini (Chapter 4) - Wed 15 Sep 2010
That was really sweet. Good job on the chapter and good luck with your business school application!
Oh! I really like this story so far:) You seem to have a good handle on the characters and your story flows nicely. This Siki cannot wait for your next update!
~Siki
Trugemini (Chapter 3) - Fri 06 Aug 2010
That was cute and sweet. It's good he cgot along with her brothers. So what brings Rin around and how will this bring them closer? Can't wait to find out!
It's a good story but I have a question... Why did it got from narrators POV to Sesshy's??
Another sweet chapter. So far the story flows well. Keep up the great work.
The first tease. I like it. Great job on starting this off!
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