It is interesting for a starter. Yet, in my opinion, this is too rushed. Slow down a bit, perhaps lengthen the part where Naraku is concerned... or a glimpse of this so-called prophecy. However, in your own way, you have intrigued the reader enough to want to read more. Good job. :)
This is an interesting concept you have written. I like how you began your chapter with a stranger finding the dying mother. I felt a taste of mystery there.
This chapter made me curious to see how Kagome has grown up. Did she know of her real mother's death? I also wonder how Naraku knows of her. Is it connected to the reason for Kagome's mother's death? All these questions are probably going to be answered in the future chapters. I hope you will continue.
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