Elisa, this is a good story, but it could be better. I think you were writing too fast, trying to get it from head to computer. You need to watch your verb tenses, you kept switching from past to present. Also, I think you would benefit from reading this aloud before you post it, you can pick up a lot of mistakes that way. But it is a good, albeit very sad, story and I'd love to know what Sesshoumaru did to Kagome's enemies.
