I have to say that was different. But I LOVED it. The passion between two forbidden lovers makes the stroy delicious. Its that same feeling you get when you read a yaoi about a gay guy who loves a straight guy and bring him to the dark world of pleasure. I love this story. You managed to captured the very feeling expected of those characters in that situation.
I have to say though that chapter two seems perfect to end it. I think it may end up a little redundant should you continue. Not that I doubt your story telling skills and what not, but I think you should wrap this up to a lovely fordidden themed oneshot. If you want to continue it please go ahead, I love your work!!
Others may disagree of course, like them, I'm addicted to your sinful delicious story telling skills. Please bless us with more. We dont know what we would do without you.
With Much FAN Love
D.O.D
inugirl18 (Chapter 2) - Wed 18 Aug 2010
I reeally like this story because it is diffrent and you have a good story to work with, and even though some don't like it but some will love it. Its sexy, hot, and a heel of a story line keep going u have something grate in the palm of your hand.
faby (Chapter 2) - Sat 31 Jul 2010
nice cant wait till the next chapter
Brandie (Chapter 2) - Wed 23 Jun 2010
I really don't think this chapter was bad I liked it and can't wait to read more soon
angela (Chapter 1) - Wed 23 Jun 2010
Do I need to emphasize HOW MUCH I LOVE THIS???? Its an awesome story! >.< Please update soon, this si soo goood man! Where'd you get this idea? I hope you wirte a new chppy soon!
-Angela
P.S. did i mention that I LOVE this story? <3
Tsuki (Chapter 2) - Wed 23 Jun 2010
I really like this a lot!! It's so taboo, but it's really good. It's written really welll (:
I loveeee it (:
With the title of "The Stepfather" I had instantly become skeptical. I was curious as to what the story would entail, and let's just say that my curiosity caused me to read the begining of a story that is both very taboo and explicity detailed. You do write well, as one reviewer did mention, yet I still cannot overcome the bare fact; he is her father. If not by blood, then by obligation and family ties. I also do doubt that a 13 year old girl would have the maturity level to even comprehend what is going on. I would think she is acting the way she does not because she too "lusts" for him, but she seeks attention (not sexual attention, but just attention from a parent). Thus, she is accepting the advances as attention. I would expect an adult to be responsible also, yet to even think he would allow himself such liberties is appaling. I do know that you adressed comments like mine, yet I could not help myself from saying something.
gladys (Chapter 1) - Mon 10 May 2010
i love it please do another 1 itz really good keep it up <(^.^)>
That was really interesting. :)
I hope you do make a second one!
Tsuki (Chapter 1) - Mon 10 May 2010
Wow, that was really good.
kiara10020 (Chapter 1) - Mon 10 May 2010
PLZ do a follow up on it. It was a good opening and i hope you write more for it.
Ashley (Chapter 1) - Mon 10 May 2010
You know... I like it alot. Please follow-up. Is it wrong that i liked it so much?
I'm sorry, I couldn't even finish reading it. The moment I saw her age and that there was no "fastforward" moment that made her what I find a more acceptable age, I just had to stop.
There's no nice way to say this, but with the age difference and the status of everyone involved, what you wrote IS a rape scene. It is statutory rape, no two ways about it. Not calling it that is unfair to potential readers, I feel. Since it is rape, it really should have a rape warning on it.
Your writing style is awesome, and I'd love to see more from you that wasn't rape. I'm just not a fan of it. And I'm really sorry if my pointing out the whole missing-warning thing offended you.
wow very hot! I definitely loved it. i really hope you do decide to add another chapter to it. Take care! ^-^
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