Shit that was good! With the girl at the end, that was freaky. Lols but sad. Great work!

creepy and sad.  I'm torn.  I don't know if i'm more freaked or just very sad.  Maybe just a little disturbed.

Great story!!

I think you need to leave a warning on the story's summary about the ending.  That was rather shocking to get to, and you leave no hint that it's so dark.