Great story but realquick when dod Kagome become so cruel? She pretty much told her son : I'm your mom but not your real mom. Also you are a product of rape. He is a chold by his races stand point (inuyasha was at least 50 when kagome meet him and still a teenager). So she told a toddler who has not even bee weaned yet hhese horrible truths...smh

Very cute story!

I have read this before and I enjoyed reading it. I just realized that in this chapter she only stays with Toga and his father for about 2 months before she leaves to start traveling.

Midoriko*
Musume*
And btw, interesting story :D  

a good plot but fast phase an anti climatic.

Interesting story, it was fun to read! (:

I have to say this story was well made. I enjoyed every second of reading your story. Keep up writing because I would love to read more of your stories.

Got a bit cheesy there lol

For Pete's sake its "Then" not "Than" there's so much of that mistake in here. I think I've actually read this before. Good story

I teared up a bit. But this needs and editor hun. So many misspelt words

Amazing story! I ended up reading straight through, couldn't put it down (:

So for your story Inuyoukai grow really fast? Considering that in 2 weeks and 3 days Toga has grown to the size of a 4 year old. Or is he small like Shippo? Which is a fox... Who's Goh? What does he look like? Is he kind of similar to Kirara? When I like to write here’s some of my tips.

-You could add more descriptions to even the smallest of things, people, plants, ect. To lengthen the chapter and/or just create more chapters.

-Don't be afraid to mix up stuff. Like randomness added to snippets. Or in this case you could add more accounts of Kagome and Toga interacting. -chuckles- Oh my gosh they could get into so much trouble!

Okay.... another is to take a deep breath once in a while.

-Try not to rush things to get your point across.

-If it helps create an outline. Even if you write a jumble first copy to work with or a scrawl on a random sheet of paper.

-Always, try to have fun! Creating characters and their personalities are a delight! Who knows what you can accomplish? The normal tricky thing about it is keeping those characters in tune with their personalities even when you try to warp it.

Again, if this bothers you. I apologies. It just seems like your story is becoming cryptic. But, because of my insatiable curiosity I can’t resist to continue reading your story to figure out what path you chose to put her on. I will enjoy it either way. Every writers story has it’s voice and a piece of the author’s creativity. Even the smallest of chapters. That can create the biggest of blooming fields.

lol Wait, one last question for ch.2. How did Toga get pup-napped?

Wait... is he a child or a baby? Because there is a Vast difference. Near the end of this chapter you had said that it was time for him to be weaned. That means he's the size of a baby but in the begining you had said he was tied up. Insinuating and hinting that he was older than a baby that was being weaned. -sweatdrop- Then the difference between a child 'who walks and runs' and todler 'that is just starting to walk' it can be quite confusing...

Don't get me wrong this story is interesting and I like how you had gotten Kagome to train to become strong. Later going way, way, futher into the past, and down the well. Even if chapter 1 was also confusing. Which is expected becuase of how you had written it and the layout of how "literally from summary and your writing style" That you would explain in later chapters. I was just curious about my origional question up top.

If my bluntness bothers you, sorry. ^-^'

read it over 4 times and i love it every time!!!

~*Dragon*~

Started the story and the immediate spelling error of Shikon no Tama has put me off the story. I skimmed the rest of the chapter due to my hunch that there were other glaring mistakes and I was not wrong. I am a stickler for major character and object names being misspelled, more than my pet peeve of misuse of words due to ignorance of the difference i.e. "breath/breathe, bath/bathe, there/their/they're". I apologize, but I will be unable to proceed any further without these errors being tended to. 

--Kaminoko (c)2011

Oh man I was hoping for more. I absolutly loved this story. I hope there is a sequel. Please? Thanks for a great story.

this story was great..I think I read it before but I don't ever remember finishing it..I'm glad I found it &  I love it

I have to say... thought your story looks promising, i was unable to get into it due to glaring mistakes.  Simple mistakes distract readers and decrease a story's merit.

Herd is a group or pack of animals.  Heard is the past tense of the verb hear.

Also, I must point out the Japanese language is quite magnificent in its simplicity.  They have a strict alphabet they stick to.  2 glaring errors from your story:

 Shekon no Toma.  Though it is possible to say this in Japanese, it would be pronounced by the Japanese ShAYkon no TOma.

In reality what u were searching for was ?????? - quite literally shikon no tama.

I also noticed in the comments you misspelled Midoriko, instead choosing to spell it Miderko.  Again, in Japanese simplified her name is ????.  Literally Midoriko.  

I find if you work to improve these small spelling and translation errors, more people will read your works.  Readers at Dokuga know even the proper Japanese translations.  I am sure if you fix these small errors, more people will give your story a chance!

this is ok but I know you could do better. please updata