Hello there Aura.
I've been reading quite a few of your stories today after I stumbled upon your story called "Letters, Love, War." I have to say that your stories are very well written and very captivating. But, there is one error that I've seen a quite a few times in your stories. Not a large one mind you; but something that is a minor irritation.
I noticed that you have been using the word "sense" in the place of "since" in every story I've read. An easy mistake but please take note of it.
Sense is like "I can sense something" or something along these lines 'Kagome turned around and looked to the west. Addressing the group she announced; "Hey guys! I can sense a shard in that direction!"
The "sense" that you've been using in your stories is supposed to be "since." With that a sentence can go; "Since there was no one else around Kagome decided that this would be a great time to write in her journal." or "Since when did you care about her?"
Sorry if I sound like a pompous know-it-all and sorry if someone already brought that to your attention but I just thought to let you know.
But other than that, great job on your writing. I can honestly say that I enjoy reading it very much and I think that the way you've written this story is suited to the album. Keep up with the good work and know that you have a new fan who eagerly awaits any new stories.
Sincerely,
~Soubi Shoukyaku
Jess (Chapter 1) - Fri 08 Jan 2010
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