I truthfully dont know why this hasn't garnered more attention, other than that it hasn't been updated in so long. Because you really have a great start here! It appears to be well edited, as I didnt find any glairingly obvious grammar or spelling mistakes (although they arn't my strong suit.) I really liked how you have characterized Inuyasha in this, and I thought that line about her maybe still having something to do, to be insightful for him (he's prone to a few rare moments like this! lol) Hope to see you update!
This was very interesting, Im curious as to who this new villian you have created is...Over all this was very well written, however there were a few spelling and grammar errors that a quick editing session will easily fix. I truely enjoyed the read and will be looking forward to your next update...Keep up the good work!