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(Chapter 1) - Sat 10 Oct 2009

Wow i never thought i'd actually be leaving myself a review and I'm kind of not. This is in respone to Zeb, I would have done a private message but am unable to and since Zeb did not wish to continue reading this story he/she will never see an author's note. First of Zeb than youk for your constructive criticism as always it's greatly appreaciated and I am sorry you didn't like this story, while I try to write for the varying degrees of people in the world I can't please everyone and I am more than okay with that. To explain your first problem with it, of course Sesshomaru and Kagome are out of character, I am not Rumiko Takahashi and am incapable of writing the characters exactly as she did. This is my own interpretation to them and since it is fan fiction it does not follow the anime-manga to a T (it would be plagerism if it did and what's the point in reading it if you've already done so?) Second I don't recall claiming that Kagome was stronger than Inuyasha except perhaps when they are glaring at each other, come on Kagome was downright scary when she was angry and to actually have such a valid reason? She was betrayed by them, and being betrayed by someone who you thought loved you is incredibly damaging. For all intents and purposes, Kagome is the sweetest and most innocent person alive in the anime world (that I've seen so far anyway) and to have her world shattered so irrevocably... well I'd fall off my rocker to.

As for her learning her Miko powers in the future instead of the Feudal Era, well while she was travelling with the Inu Tachi there never really was any time for her to stop and study and if she had done so Inuyasha would have most likely complained incessantly until she gave in and agreed to leave. That and some lessons when self taught or discovered tend to stick a bit better and there's nothing more rewarding then knowing you did something by yourself. As for her weapon skills well yes she worked with a sensei in her time and Sesshomaru has been aiding her as well now that she's in the Feudal Era once more. She knew right away that she would have to go back to the past so set out to learn as much as possible in the time allowed because she no longer wished to be viewed as weak and pathetic.

In regards to her mother, that was mainly due to a major misunderstanding that Kagome blew out of proportion, at the time she returned to the future she was still a teenager and suffering severely from major emotional overload. So she overreacted; as you learn in later chapters- she's only human and humans (or people in general be they of any species) are apt to make a few mistakes every now and then.

And I'm not quite sure what you meant about her being brought back to life because she was never killed, and if she had been and Sesshomaru had brought her back, well she would be as she was and not like Kikyou. I guess I don't know what else to say about that. And lastly you had a problem with her language, stating that she is swearing more than Inuyasha, well I'm afraid that's a little bit of myself leaching into my rendition of Kagome. I happen to be quite the potty mouth on a good day and on a bad day I sound worse than a sailer (you can even ask my mom if you don't believe me lol). Also you have to keep in mind, this is not the same Kagome you've read about in the manga or even read about in other stories on this site.

Well I think i've gotten everything covered and hope this helps anyone who's slightly confused or not sure about this story when they first start out (provided they check the reviews first LOL). Thank you for reading as i preah on my soap box and as always thank you for your reviews, I truly appreciate it... even if you are telling me you don't like my story.

 

                                                    With warm fuzzy feelings,

                                                                   Quiet Whisper


Zeb (Chapter 5) - Sat 10 Oct 2009

I don't like this story for a few reasons, the main reason being that Sesshomaru and Kagome are very out of character. Also, Kagome almost seems like a Mary-Sue. She claims to be stronger than Inuyasha and the rest of her gang. Can you please tell me how she mangaged to go above and beyond with her Miko powers in the future while she couldn't do it in the past with all the Miko's in Feudal Era? I would usually take the time to read the whole story to see if my questions are answered and before leaving a review but I don't want to continue reading this story. Next, we have Kagome being a total bitch? If she was killed and brought back to life she wouldn't be such an asshole. I guess she would be like Kikyo?:/ And I don't see why Kagome was being so disrespectful to her mom. So her mom gave her a lot of space when she came back into the present, that's no reason to be so rude. Also, what was with Kagome's language? She doesn't have to curse everytime a sentence comes out of her mouth. I get she would be hurt and angry but she has cursed more than Inuyasha in this story.


1CarinoInu (Chapter 20) - Sat 10 Oct 2009

Hee hee.  I love the cryptic side of Sesshoumaru, - not quite ready to reveal all to Kagome.  Very well done!

I look forward to the next update :)


TruGemini (Chapter 20) - Sat 10 Oct 2009

Even though she said she forgave Miroku...where was the feeling of something returning, or the light shower? Is she really that tired as to just grant it without asking anything? Miroku was like a brother to her and was the voice of reason and compassion beside herself. Anyway, that's just me. Noticed a few errors on this chapter just in case you wanted to know. I encased the corrections.

“Well you do realize you('re) never going
“And it's been to(o) quiet lately.”
“Are you going to tell me I'm being to(o) hard on him?”


autumngold (Chapter 20) - Sat 10 Oct 2009

Good for Kagome.  She's forgiven everyone but Inuyasha.  I understand that she is doing this for herself, but how can she forgive someone (Inuyasha) who doesn't want to be forgiven?  She needs to for her own health, but he doesn't want it.  How will she be able to live with this knowledge?  Thanks for the update!  I just hope that Sesshoumaru will be able to keep Kagome safe from Naraku.  She has been through so much pain, she doesn't need to go through more! 


stars (Chapter 19) - Sat 10 Oct 2009

please updata


TruGemini (Chapter 19) - Sat 10 Oct 2009

I'm glad she is repairing herself. Forgiveness is for you, not the other person. But, Kikyo must die! Really, she makes me sick and I can't stand her...enough of my hating. (Deep Breath) great job on the continuing story. Please keep up the great work.


autumngold (Chapter 19) - Sat 10 Oct 2009

It's good that Kagome forgave Sango.  I wouldn't have, but then I never had the world hanging on my decisions and not even my husband would call me sweet, innocent or "light".  :)  I'm glad that Kagome isn't so hardened that she can't learn to care again.  I hope the people that she's forgiven don't expect her to suddenly become bright, sunshine Kagome again.  They have to be able to see how much they've broken her.  I just hope they are able to protect her from Naraku and Kikyo.  Please update again soon!  I'm really enjoying this story!


autumngold (Chapter 18) - Fri 09 Oct 2009

I'm glad that Kagome is going to forgive everyone, for her own sake.  However, I don't think that Inuyasha has earned that.  He has done nothing to help Kagome and still doesn't think that he did anything wrong.  How can Kagome forgive him when he doesn't think he needs forgiveness?  Your story, and updates, are incredible!  Can't wait for more! 


autumngold (Chapter 17) - Thu 08 Oct 2009

Thank you for the new update!  I'm so glad that Kagome has Sesshoumaru to talk to.  It's nice that he isn't constantly telling her that she is worthless and useless like Inuyasha always used to.  I have a feeling that Kagome will forgive Sango and Miroku soon, although I still don't think they realize how much they hurt Kagome.  How would either of them feel if they were told they were of no use?  Sango says she didn't want to lose Kagome to death, but wasn't what she did to her just as bad?  Can't wait for your next update!  I really, really want Kagome to live after the battle with Naraku is over!  Too many people need her, unlike Kikyo, for her to give up her life!


1CarinoInu (Chapter 17) - Thu 08 Oct 2009

This is a really great story.  I like seeing the tougher side of Kagome, and piquing the interest of a certain Demon Lord.  Very intriguing.

Please update soon.  


WhiteRose-Kurama (Chapter 16) - Thu 08 Oct 2009

I'm sooo glad you updated again cuz I was beginning to think that you forgot about this fic and your loyal readers. You are one of the few writers that are able to portray a Kagome that is more bitter and angry yet still vulnerable at the same time. It takes a master to go from a completely broken Kagome to a kickass no-nonsense fighting miko. I wonder what it will take to heal Kagome's broken heart... How much patient does Sesshou possess? Will he be able to help Kagome in her healing process? Keep up the good work and update soon. :P


autumngold (Chapter 16) - Thu 08 Oct 2009

Very intense story.  Poor Kagome has gone through so much, I don't blame her for not being able to forgive.  Isn't cute how her "friends" sent her away, but when times got tough they wanted her back.  Kagome's thoughts were right, they do just use her like a tool.  Hopefully Kikyo will get killed though, I don't want Kagome to have to die at the end by giving away her soul.  Will Sesshoumaru be able to help Kagome?  Please post another chapter soon!


Yamiyo (Chapter 15) - Thu 08 Oct 2009

Let The Bodies Hit The Floor is by Drowning Pool not Rob Zombie just so you know.

Like the story too hope to see lots more chapties before it ends.


Walter205 (Chapter 16) - Thu 08 Oct 2009

 Mmmm, I'm not really liking the way Sango is being portrayed in this story, I really think she is one of the ones who should have been forgiven easily, but whatever.

 

 Apart from that, I really do like this story and the angle/approach you've taken. I'm looking forward to more chapters. =D


Black Alice Butterfly (Chapter 16) - Thu 08 Oct 2009

. . . i think this is one of the best fanfictions i've ever read. KEEP IT UP!


darkpsychoqueen (Chapter 15) - Wed 29 Apr 2009
ooo i cant wait to see kagome start to fall for sesshomaru and i cant wait to see how u have sess win over kags cant wait for u to update

darkpsychoqueen (Chapter 7) - Wed 29 Apr 2009
ok im re reading this story and a question pops up how does sesshomaru know what a bullet is im they havent been introduced yet?

BlessedEpiphany (Chapter 14) - Sat 04 Apr 2009
Not that I don't totally love bitchy Kagome (she reminds me of myself) but I'm just wondering how long its going to take for her to become civil with the others. I understand that the forgiveness will be slow in coming but I'm just curious as to how slow the process is going to be. I love your story and I can't wait to see where you take it. Keep up the wonderful job.

NightQueen (Chapter 14) - Sat 04 Apr 2009

I've just read the last few updates and once again I have to say Fabulous!!!! I really love the story line and the way you've written my favorite characters is just awesome.  Storm has become one of my favorite original characters in a fic.  Keep writing and I'll keep reading! Thanks!


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