I gotta say this story like all of your stories rock.... I am waiting for update on all of your stories... Can't believe how talented you are and this one had me laughing because of Koga and this last chapter when Kagome mentioned her being an E.R. Nurse arms deep in blood and guts.... Then Sesshomaru's reply So were mine making her think he was in the medical field... oh how funny was that.... Yeah those type of jokes fit Sesshomaru... Update soon please.
I love the way you started this story. A simple but attention grabbing sentence. He smelled like electricity. Who and what does it even smell like? I also like the way you continued by seamlessly adding Kagome's backstory as a child tinkering with her dad. It's hard to entice me but I'm caught hook, line and sinker
Your prose is excellent, your metaphors vivid. It doesn't matter if the premise is cliche, execution makes it bearable. And I'm hunkering for yours. Please dont change your style. You might as well tell me you have written a published book and I would believe it. I'm looking to read the rest of this story and the rest of all your stories. Sorry I'm writing this comment on the metro so it’s kinda messy.
Love, Lucy
I love the way you started this story. A simple but attention grabbing sentence. He smelled like electricity. Who and what does it even smell like? I also like the way you continued by seamlessly adding Kagome's backstory as a child tinkering with her dad. It's hard to entice me but I'm caught hook, line and sinker
Your prose is excellent, your metaphors vivid. It doesn't matter if the premise is cliche, execution makes it bearable. And I'm hunkering for yours. Please dont change your style. You might as well tell me you have written a published book and I would believe it. I'm looking to read the rest of this story and the rest of all your stories. Sorry I'm writing this comment on the metro so it’s kinda messy.
Love, Lucy
Jade (Chapter 9) - Fri 21 Oct 2022
A lot of people use the shorter format as a challenge to themselves. You don't have to do that if you don't want to, write however you feel! I personally prefer the longer chapters of some authors.
It's your choice really, write chapter lengths that make sense to your story.
Anyways, great work on this it's interesting.
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