Hello,
I finally found some time to catch up with this story! You have chosen a very controversal topic to write about and that makes the story even more interesting. I like the pacing so far!!! Keep it up like that!
The way you write about Kagome's inner battle is great! Her fight between feelings and morals gives the whole story life. The poor girl is going to explode some day. XD
I think it was a good idea to write about Sesshoumaru's thoughts. You have added some layers to his personality with that. I never thought that he would feel insecure and anxious. And I was kind of afraid that he was interested in her because of his studies. But no there are only real feelings, thanks for clearing that up. I'm also wondering if he never felt uneasy with that step-sibling issue, or if he just was able to sort things out and make a decision. That would mean that he is a few steps ahead of Kagome.
I love that you wrote the bathroom scene twice just with reversed roles! Showering Sesshoumaru was hot, you described every detail - his movements and her feelings/thoughts. That was great!!! Bathing Kagome was less descriptive, or maybe I was just distracted from the picture of Sesshoumaru laying on the floor and peeking.
Mama Higurasi seems to be clueless though I'm not sure about Inupapa. Could it be that he knows/suspects? Why else would he send Sesshoumaru to look after her and not Souta?
Anyways, I'm looking forward to your next update! Now that they have to go separate ways again things are going to get even more interesting!
Nallely (Chapter 6) - Thu 05 Sep 2019
Ok, you need to keep going with this amazing fic, I actually like this Sesshomaru and Kags, they are diferent but not OOC.
Lemons all around. Yummy! Bad dog...wonderful updat! Thanks!
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