This was a very good one shot. I personally think you could take it further if you wanted but that was a good end point.

It ended positively and the reader can use their imagination for what happens afterwards. Kudos!

i really liked it, and i was sorry that it ended so quickly :)   i would love to read a sequel! 

Enjoyed reading this. Looking forward to more stories from you. You did great btw 

Hi! I think you did a splendid job with your oneshot. All those emotions can be hard to get across, but I think you did a splendid job. I can't wait to see what you come up with next :)

Really good for a first time .

This one shot is well-written and I agree with your premise as far as the Kagome/Inuyasha relationship goes. Yes, Inuyasha was verbally abusive, she was being used, that promise she made to Inuyasha was dumb and it was selfish of him to accept it. However, this seems like pity party for Kagome without much backstory into how the group devolved in such a way.

It's also weird that Sesshoumaru would even feel sorry for her. He hardly blinked an eye about Kagura's plight, telling her to save herself if she wanted freedom, so why would he feel sorry for a person who is wallowing in self-pity for a situation she helped to create?

I really like the idea, but the one shot as is a little bit unbelievable. It's lacking the telling of a story. This was more like an explanation than a progression.

That being said, I like your writing and will continue reading whatever you put out.

Love the story, wish it had been longer. You have talent as a writer.

Holy heck! 

this is definitly going on my fav list. 

it's very well written, and I think you gave it good depth. The characters doesn't seem too ooc, and when they do it is explained so that it makes sense for the story.

I really hope there will be a sequel to this!

Love the story can't wait for another chapter to be posted

What an excellent one shot. It is very well written and gave the two main characters depth. I loved how you brought Kagome and Sessho together. It doesn't seem complete though. I would so love to see you add another one or two more chapters to this sad but wonderful story. I am wondering if Kilala made a decision to leave Sango and attach her loyalty to Kagome based on how Kagome was being treated by Sango and everyone else.

Personally, I would like to see Kagome stronger and bring out the power she has buried deep inside her and I would like to know what becomes of her so called friends, especially when it is Kagome and Sesshomaru that defeats Naraku with Kilala in her new pack if she makes the decision to leave Sango. Definitely would like Kagome to get her other half of her soul back. 

You are a good writer and have read some of your other stories. Hopefully you will find the inspiration and time to add more to this story. I will keep checking back once in a while.  Lol  :)

I love your story. Please continue. I want Kagome to become stronger and to tell her so called pack off.

Love it like all your stories hope you put more too it

This seems like a good story. I hope you decide to continue it, If you had/have any ideas that is. I don't like to "nag" people by practically begging for more.