WOW!! I can't wait until the next chapter.I can't wait to see what Kagome and Rin will do to pore Sesshoumaru.

Wow this is really good. I like it a lot. Please keep on writing more. I want to read more about Rin's tom tantrums.
T.O.M=time of the month. ^.^

^^

PleAs RevIeW! I lIke iT !! ThnK YOu!

^^

this looks like its going to be a very interesting story

Ok, I think this is funny and it's going to be great!

I read the first chapter, then I read the original version of this, and there is great improvement from the original. I think there is better details and the chapter flows better to help you get into the story. Are you sticking with what you originally had and just improving it? I'm asking, because I like the idea of Rin liking such an older 'man' and her secretly trying to get Sesshomaru and Kagome together. If so, I hope you will explain why Rin would like Kagome with her 'father' and her reasons for doing this for Sesshomaru. Also, maybe explain more of Rin's attraction to the general and maybe have a flashback to show how they first met and when Rin realized her feelings for him. Those are just suggestions, but you don't have use them if you have something different in mind. So, good job of the rewrite and update when you can.