The first chappie made me cry. I was absolutely beautiful. *Sigh* but you really should have left it as a one shot. i know how hard it is to leave things off so darkly, i too have a love for happy endings, but i really do think that in this case it would have been better. When everythibng just works out so smoothly, it leaves very little to touch the heart, but if you had ended things with their deaths, you would have people screaming WHY!!! OH WHY!!! HOW COLD SHE BE SO EVIL!!! and so on. anyways, that's what i think. And getting a reaction from people (wheather good or bad) is what i love most about writing fanfic.
On a different note. You should really, i can't emphasize this enough, REALLLY put space dividers between you paragraphs. I almost didn't read because as soon as the chapter opened and i saw large groupings of words, i was very turned off. Usually this means that the author is either lazy or just plain bad, and your story was definately not bad, so why ruin it with improper spacing? Also, the poem that Sess had written in that letter would have been easier to read and more suited if it actually did read as as a poem...you know stanzas and clustered thoughts. I love poetry, and part of waht makes it so wonderful is the flow, but you loose it when you group the words togeather like that.
Anyways...this was a really long review. Teehee sorry, i have a rambling problem. But again, the story was awsome. Keep it up.
ShadowsWeaver1

Strangely enough, I enjoyed both chapters. It is a nice change to have a dard fiction where the heroes die. Sadness is neccessary to balance happiness. But then again, I enjoyed the happy ending in the second chapter. What can I say, I'm a sucker for second chances and happy endings. If you write another chapter, I would love to see how this goes, and about the now youkai tachi heading to the palace of the Moon. And who might this other black inuyoukai be???? (possibly a transformed kikyo??hmm????)
Keep up the good work!