THIS IS SO COOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ya know at the end of the fic Sessy's mom and inu's mom should blame Inu-no-tashio for everything bad in their lives and put a binding spell on him!!!!!!!!!!!!!

THIS IS SO COOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ya know at the end of the fic Sessy's mom and inu's mom should blame Inu-no-tashio for everything bad in their lives and put a binding spell on him!!!!!!!!!!!!!

THIS IS SO COOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ya know at the end of the fic Sessy's mom and inu's mom should blame Inu-no-tashio for everything bad in their lives and put a binding spell on him!!!!!!!!!!!!!

ok. I'm going to be brutally honest here. I think you two have an interesting idea for a fan fic but you REALLY need someone to beta it. Just from the introduction of our two authors I was turned off by the grammar and spelling. I thought give it a chance maybe they put all of their thought into the chapters instead.
I tried to read the first paragraph of chapter one and the death of the coma struck me as a tragedy. Too many phrases are trying to be turned and not enough thought or grammar checking is going into the flow of the piece.
Chapter two was a little more promising. The grammar dilema still persists, however, it was slightly better - though this may be due to the fact that all that I read was dialogue.

Simply from skimming this I can say that I would not be able to read one chapter in a sitting. I am afraid I've been spoiled by well edited pieces with plot and character development. I can't judge on the last two, but of the former you are in dire need of assistance.

please continue please

OMG Please update!! You Haven't Updated In Ages And This Is Such A Great Story!! Please!!!! I Shalt Love You Both Forever If You Update!!

Pretty Please!!

hehehehehehe! keep going!