CherishMoon- Sun 20 Apr 2008
You know what, I love your story, and if any of them haters/flamers have a fucking problem with it, fuck them. I also agree with sesssbabygurl , I like storys like yours where it moves along quick, but sometimes i'm not in the mood, you know? But lately i've been reading some slow, slow, slow, very, very , very slow stories. I mean they don't even get together till chapter fucking 20 or 30.Anyway Great Story.I love it.Your in my favs^_^

Kagome357- Tue 01 Apr 2008
Your summary drew me in because with the exception of one spelling error it's actually well written but I was horrified by the content of the story. I agree with JosieKnox. Could your flamers been more constructive? Of course, but they also had a point. Uh, your personal life isn't my business and believe me I'm not trying to insinuate to the contrary, but my favorite thing to tell young writers is if you've never had sex, then don't write about it because it comes out like this. Writers write lemons like this because they think that's what all readers want and most do, but give them more credit than that. Slow your pace and take your time. Yes we all like lemons (and I know lemons), but we also like a well rounded story with characters, a plot and a point and this was just sex in a musty dank cave for the sake of it.

Don't be discouraged. Take your time and write what you know and understand. I hope you take my words to heart. I don't want you to think I'm being mean...

savewolf the angel of death- Mon 31 Dec 2007
i love this fanfic hey my adress is normamourani@yahoo.com if you haven yahoo send me an email or im me ok maybe we can be friends and starst new stories for these two(meanign sesshomaru and kagome ) and maybe even rp or chat and make jokes and talk abotu the series ( dot worry im nto a perv if youre a guy just so you knwo im f 19 and from puerto rico ok i know what its like to be afraid to chat with strangers but i am not a pev i enjoy these stories and yourse is one fo the best if not the best of wht ive read so far so i hope we can chat and be friends if you doo have a yahoo account add normamourani and a pen name or nickname yo can put either norma or savewolf since its my nickname in real life here

Dreaming_oF_Falling- Fri 23 Nov 2007
The story moved too quickly. Way too quickly. It would have been better to have... well too many to actually list. You don't have much detail, and you didn't have much rising actions. They hate each other, then in 5 minutes they decide to have sex? Try to be more realistic next time.

Ana- Wed 24 Oct 2007
Heheh, cute! A little rushed at the sex scene, but, hey, it's good all the same ^_^
Sorry to read about the flamers, but yah know how it is... Anyhow, goodluck with your exams! Itll next time!

Lady Care- Wed 24 Oct 2007
Like your story so far please make you chapters longer and with more detail!! Oh and by the way just ingnore bad reviews. Good luck on your exam's.

sesshysbabygurl- Wed 24 Oct 2007
For all the Reviewers who flamed you and told you it wasn't good or whatever, should try writing there own storys, its not easy. It is called fanfiction for a reason it is how you see the characters, and if you see them like that there isn't any reason why you shouldn't be proud of your work. I wanted to tell you I enjoyed this story. It was sweet. I think you should defenitly write a sequel
Frankly I think the storys that take forever to get to Kagome and Sesshomaru saying they like eachother are drawn out why have 42 boring chapters when you can write 5 exciting ones. Good luck with your work, don't listen to those that don't have an imagination on good reading.
Hope to see more of you.

JosieKnox- Wed 24 Oct 2007
I'm not sure about the reviews for you other fics, but yes some in this one are a little harsh; but they're right. This might be FanFiction but you also have it listed as a cannon universe if you want it to be accurate it needs to be an alternate universe if you want to mess with aspects of their personality. The point of reviews is to help someone make better quality stories; if you go around saying that it's fanfiction I can write what I want no one will take you seriously. People on this site take writing seriously. I'm not trying to be mean, but there is a reason that out of the five reviews you got, only two were positive; and they happen to be the typical "nice I want more" and I'm sure they say that to every fic they come across. I personally don't even like the ratings system; but you got to think that something is up if 59 people are agreeing that your story is a 4.**

Were they harsh, kind of
Could it have been said differently, maybe
Did it need to be said……. if you want people to like your writing then yes

So try not to get mad at those comments, and rant in note added to the end of your fic. The best way to get yours back is to show them that you can make the story better.

And the only way any of what I have told you is relevant is if you do in fact care about the quality of your work.

litlest_amazon- Mon 05 Mar 2007
Wait was this one of those fake fics? I read the last few lines beginning with the orgasm and realized this must be a joke fic or written by someone who has never wittnessed or done these acts. So either I feel really stupid for commenting on a fake fic or I feel really really bad for having such harsh criticism for such an unexperienced author. IF this is a real fic then I'm sorry.

litlest_amazon- Mon 05 Mar 2007
CCC has it right. Thank you so much for not being a mindless reviewer. I started laughing. I tried to read the lemon but the improbability of this ever occuring just made it so humourous. I'm sure I've read this before too and gave up then as well. We went from cold Kagome - running away from demons that can't harm her - to kagome having hot painful amateur porn with a suddenly smitten and less than haughty sesshoumaru. "yeah continue" I'm not sure about you, but usually when I'm in the throes of passion those are not the first thoughts or words from my mouth. "Yes" maybe, or "please continue" at my most eloquent but rarely "yeah continue". Also no one wants to read oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh. You can just right that someone moaned, huskily, throatily, in a high pitched keen, with fullfillment, take your pick.

It takes most people some time to say I love you or give up an intimate moment. With a girl like Kagome who blushes at hugs or a grope, I love you + hot demon sex might be a bit hasty.

Sassy- Tue 30 Jan 2007
O_O Um ok? Nice, real nice. Later.

CCC- Tue 05 Dec 2006
You rushed it. And Sesshoumaru would never out rigjht care that she as cold. and he would never kiss her first (I think) It did seem good but i didn't even feel like reading the lemon.

Megan Consoer- Tue 23 May 2006
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters? Or can you write a sequel to this story please?

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